tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post3090672952151150754..comments2024-02-06T08:43:35.333+01:00Comments on Sea Legs Girl: short article - advice needed!sea legs girlhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14782712411873234071noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-78086355908135965632012-05-28T05:14:13.167+02:002012-05-28T05:14:13.167+02:00Thanks, Steve! I made the decision a few days ago ...Thanks, Steve! I made the decision a few days ago to take the sentence out and have now submitted the little article. <br /><br />I think it is a lot better thanks to everyone's feedback - thank you so much to the readers who took the time to help!sea legs girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14782712411873234071noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-159044270975644972012-05-27T20:38:22.375+02:002012-05-27T20:38:22.375+02:00I'm going to keep my comments to myself, as I&...I'm going to keep my comments to myself, as I'm a little mad at all physicians at the moment, except to agree with the others that the Christiansen comment makes it sound like you're in her league and considered going for her record.SteveQhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16943650844671498074noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-68445116297252948792012-05-24T04:12:25.712+02:002012-05-24T04:12:25.712+02:00Mmmonyka. Thank you so much for your ideas! I just...Mmmonyka. Thank you so much for your ideas! I just have to say that the Ingrid Christiansen thing accomplishes many things in my mind: pregnant marathoning has been done before and a long time ago and in a very fast time! Kind of puts things in a good perspective in my mind.<br /><br /><br />Robyn, I like your suggestion for the first line, but then I'm quite a bit above the word limit, especially if I need to squeak my PR in there - plus I have no clue what number marathon that was and don't know how I would figure out. Plus at that point I'd run more ultras than marathons, so it is hard for me to just throw out a number there.<br /><br />I'm taking all of this into consideration. <br /><br />Steve Q, here are some examples of what they want:<br />http://www.aafp.org/afp/viewRelatedDepartmentsByDepartment.htm?departmentId=1sea legs girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14782712411873234071noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-72802673429555539452012-05-24T04:11:10.811+02:002012-05-24T04:11:10.811+02:00This comment has been removed by the author.The Loraxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06866896912402476245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-49368246121959872662012-05-23T19:10:07.765+02:002012-05-23T19:10:07.765+02:00I can't make suggestions, not because I have n...I can't make suggestions, not because I have no experience with the subject (ignorance has never been a barrier for me!), but because I don't know the journal, so I don't know what they want or expect.SteveQhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16943650844671498074noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-68200368429781092462012-05-23T17:47:38.378+02:002012-05-23T17:47:38.378+02:00I would change the opening sentence to something l...I would change the opening sentence to something like "Heading into mile 20 of my Nth marathon, I couldn't understand why I was so winded. I'd never had to stop and walk in a marathon before. The answer a few days later -- a positive pregnancy test! -- was both a relief and a thrill."<br /><br />This does two things: first, it puts in context that you're an experienced marathoner; second it explains the situation a little more clearly.<br /><br />Your audience will largely not be marathon-literate. If you can work in what a "typical" marathon time is (or a "fast" time, like the BQ standard), that would help put your times in context. You could save space by giving a range of your finish times, rather than all of them.<br /><br />Love the last sentence.Robynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14582049406998358870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-50911287208886911942012-05-23T15:00:34.361+02:002012-05-23T15:00:34.361+02:00I agree with mmmonyka about listing the times. An...I agree with mmmonyka about listing the times. And I agree that listing your PR makes more sense than the reference to ingrid Christiansen. <br />The second sentence absolutely confuses me. Are you saying you didn't know you were pregnant when you ran that marathon, and you were relieved to learn it was the pregnancy that made you so slow? (I feel bad that I can't remember if that is the case, because I do read your blog, but it's a detail I just can't recall.)<br />Lovely, little description of your experience. 250 words is so little, and you've packed a great story into such a small space.Dianahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14137207492303218465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-5320506537620182562012-05-23T12:55:59.707+02:002012-05-23T12:55:59.707+02:00How about a few words on the training for a martho...How about a few words on the training for a marthon while pregnant?Kirstenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14000695114298710579noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-57121250295921015632012-05-23T09:21:17.704+02:002012-05-23T09:21:17.704+02:00Clearly, I do not know anything about the subject ...Clearly, I do not know anything about the subject but I think that also women who are thinking about having children and continuing being active read the publication. And it is important that the article leaves them feeling good and comfortable that doing so is not anything bad and it won't hurt them or the baby. And this was achieved, lot of positivity, I like that very much!<br /><br />And now let's move to the constructive criticism:)))I do not see any point in putting the reference to pregnant marathon record. I would rather put your record instead. Comparing your pre-pregnancy time and pregnancy times would make much more sense and make for a better flow. You can use only 250 words, so I would not waste them on referencing something (for me) irrelevant. It seems it is there just so you can use a big name.<br />Also, I got little confused when you talked about 6 marathons and then put only 4 finishi times in the second paragraph. You mentioned 1st marathon in the first and second paragraph and then the 6th one in the next paragraph. I know that you put time frame there (10-27 weeks) and then the time for the 6th one in the next paragraph but it is still slightly confusing. I would put all 6 finishing times together in that second paragraph, instead of only 4, and then of course leave out the time of the 6th in the third paragraph. So the reader does not have to count and go back and forth. <br />And then leave the rest at it is because I like it a lot:)mmmonykahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09703551248084847150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-7553167040562121152012-05-23T01:43:29.000+02:002012-05-23T01:43:29.000+02:00Danni and Jacqueline - I think that is a good poin...Danni and Jacqueline - I think that is a good point. I had hoped there would be a really brief bio of me accompanying this. I will have to ask the editor if that will be the case. Otherwise I'll have to sneak in something like that.<br /><br />Thanks, Julie! It is also good to know that at least one person thinks it is good enough to submit. :)sea legs girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14782712411873234071noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-59544038835842040212012-05-22T23:22:21.329+02:002012-05-22T23:22:21.329+02:00I'm not pretending to like it, I think it'...I'm not pretending to like it, I think it's great. :) And I love that your story will be out there for others to read and be inspired by.Juliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09598617751195329959noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-72659545573148414812012-05-22T22:57:13.300+02:002012-05-22T22:57:13.300+02:00I agree with Danni. I would also mention your many...I agree with Danni. I would also mention your many years of running, and how this wasn't something new or unusual for you. Deciding to train for a marathon might not be wise for a nonrunner who is pregnant, but it really was just you being your normal self. And isn't that always the advice: Do what you normally do? :-)Jacquelinehttp://jackandviv.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-834846832861622672.post-77883070297641492372012-05-22T22:12:54.712+02:002012-05-22T22:12:54.712+02:00I would throw in your marathon PR so there is a po...I would throw in your marathon PR so there is a point of reference for your finish times. It would be different if someone who always runs a 4:30 decided to try to run a 4:30 while hugely preggo.Dannihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02201053516148787578noreply@blogger.com